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You Have my Heart and Won't Let Go

February 5, 2011
By blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
8 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you must mount the gallows, give a coin to the headman, a jest to the crowd, and meet the drop with a smile on your lips."


You stole my heart,
and won't let go.
It's a start,
but I can't let it show.

These words I write,
are not for me.
They're to do what's right,
and let you see.

I wish you'd read,
this poem and know.
You have my heart and won't let go.


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on Dec. 10 2011 at 12:21 pm
SwallowedByInsanity PLATINUM, Hillsdale, New Jersey
22 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is a poison, but it is also the antidote."

I very much liked how they were all tied together with a rhyme scheme, which is surprising since I'm a big fan of free verse. Ending it with the title as your last line really made the whole thing fall into place.

on Nov. 22 2011 at 4:46 pm
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Don&#039;t punish yourself,&quot; she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing.&quot;<br /> --Markus Zusak, &quot;The Book Thief&quot;

Usually I don't really like rhyming poems, but I like the way you use rhythm (in all your poems) to keep a person reading.

on Aug. 12 2011 at 11:23 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

i like both long and short poems but i write short poems so i like to see short poems this poem was great i like the last stanza it's cute short and to the point great work:P

on Aug. 7 2011 at 9:34 pm
blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
8 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you must mount the gallows, give a coin to the headman, a jest to the crowd, and meet the drop with a smile on your lips.&quot;

 Thanks! and yeah, i wrote this at like 3 AM originally, and when i tried to expand it after the fact, the main flow and concept was gone. Thank you though! :)

on Aug. 7 2011 at 9:11 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
0 articles 0 photos 356 comments

Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~<br /> ~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~<br /> ~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than<br /> a distant memory.~

The poem is cute and short. The rhyming was okay , and I liked your concept. My only criticism would be that I wish you would have expanded it.

on Aug. 2 2011 at 4:18 pm
blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
8 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you must mount the gallows, give a coin to the headman, a jest to the crowd, and meet the drop with a smile on your lips.&quot;

Thank you :)

 


Emily.L GOLD said...
on Aug. 2 2011 at 11:54 am
Emily.L GOLD, Gilbert, Arizona
10 articles 12 photos 84 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Sometimes, we just have to be happy with what people can offer us. Even if it&#039;s not what we want, at least it&#039;s something. &quot; -Sarah Dessen

Aww, that was really cute! I liked it, and the rhyming wasn't overdone :)

on Jul. 29 2011 at 10:33 am
blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
8 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you must mount the gallows, give a coin to the headman, a jest to the crowd, and meet the drop with a smile on your lips.&quot;

thank you.

 


Kai17 GOLD said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 9:21 am
Kai17 GOLD, Spokane, Washington
17 articles 5 photos 339 comments

Favorite Quote:
*beepbeep* <br /> &quot;Where to, Miss?&quot; <br /> &quot;To the stars.&quot;

The poem was short, but really well done.

on Jul. 26 2011 at 11:51 am
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck<br /> <br /> In three words i can sum up everything I&#039;ve learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost<br /> <br /> Live, Love, Laugh - ______<br /> <br /> Hope, Love, breathe &lt;3 - Me

i really like it and i love the rhyming. i think the last verse is good! good job! :)

on Mar. 12 2011 at 8:43 pm
blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
8 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you must mount the gallows, give a coin to the headman, a jest to the crowd, and meet the drop with a smile on your lips.&quot;

thanks. it was kinda a spur of the moment thing. but thank you for taking the time to comment. :)

pianolover said...
on Mar. 10 2011 at 4:23 pm
I love this poem so much! I think it is like an innocent attraction and it is really sweet!